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what would change if i left?
would you wear your sadness
like a bullet-- raw and fresh and
slung, chafing, into solemn chambers;

or would you swallow it down
to poison your lungs,
steal your breath & dissolve
the remnants of me?

would you smoke yourself out,
a pyre of anger in one fist
smouldering with resentment--
unfueled but hot and bright and
burning our love to ashes;

or would you hang it,
trailing, coiled around your neck
where it will catch, untenanted,
on shards of me and tighten
to choke you?

would you throw in the towel
and jump, too, unfettered
without my soul;

or would you just breathe butterflies,
an exultation of relief and gratitude?
As dark as this is, it's not a suicide note. I'm not suicidal.

Sometimes I just think about leaving (but I'm not going anywhere).

If you want to leave constructive feedback you're welcome to do so, but official critique is off because I can't guarantee I will actually come back to this one for any major changes. (I will of course still take any thoughts/suggestions into consideration, and appreciate them, I just don't want to feel like I've wasted your time.)
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Rohdrez11520 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014
Damn it.

You suicide note looks just like mine, only thought out and well-worded.
Seriously, how does this keep happening?
camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for the comment!

I'm not sure what you mean by "Seriously, how does this keep happening" though?
Malco735 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It hits hard and makes an impact...such powerful words and images.

I've been dangerously close to suicide in my younger days (bullying, lack of help) so pieces like this make me realise that others go through similar thoughts. I'm on the last line though; it's all behind me now.

Really inspiring stuff! Well done
camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw, thank you. I'm glad you got good out of this!

And I'm even more glad to hear that your suicidal thoughts are behind you now! I hope you're able to keep them staved off and never have to experience that pain again. :huggle:
Malco735 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :D and thank you.

Yeah, they are now. I've staved them off for years, but it wasn't until I confronted them and openly talked about them that I felt much better. My own suicide/self-harm issues are now in the distant past and this is the future. Thank you for your kind words :huggle:
camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, I'm so glad for you! :) That really is wonderful to hear.
Malco735 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :hug: I hope you eventually feel better about yourself after all you've been through. I know this piece seems dark, but that last line gives out a little hope, which is all you need sometimes.
camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You really are such a sweetheart! Thank you.
Malco735 Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle: You are more than welcome
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